Forgive me father, for I have sinned
January11
Forgive me father
for I have sinned;
My behaviour has become
rather undisciplined
Forgive me father
for I am in pain,
you promised this would pass
oh, had you not been so vain
Forgive me father
for I am deprived of options
just as you had promised my wellbeing
I promised to stop playing with guns
Forgive me father,
for my ungodly mess
I’ve laced up the corset
of my poison dress
Forgive me father
that I’ve held so dear,
your brave daughter
left this infernal world without fear
Inspired by Ellen Hopkins’ Impulse
(Felt inspired, wrote a poem.)
Dear Roshni,
This poem touched my heart. It was so beautiful and I am at a loss for words. It has a touch of elegance and sophistication towards your writing. I could feel the emotions, and tension overide me all at once. I think I have fallen in love with this poem since it is just so amazing.
I would suggest to conclude your space issues in your lst stanaza. Besides that I have nothing else to see for improvement since I am still mesermrized.
Sincerly,
Asna
Dear Roshni,
This was incredible! I love poetry and this was an amazing piece, I appreicate you writting this! The only thing that i would improve upon was using wording more clear to what you are trying to convey to us. However, I got goose bumps reading this! I hope you write more poetry in the future!
Sincerely,
Cayleigh